Prisoners locked up
No sense of reality,
Because knowing the truth
Can be such a calamity.
So much knowledge
In so little time,
But who knew the leadership
Could require such climb.
Taking the plunge
To reveal the great wonders,
Is too often held back
With the fear of encumbers.
Deviating from the norm is hard at first,
But take action early to avoid being immersed.
nice job :) i love the first stanza! "no sense of reality, because knowing the truth can be such a calamity." Good job :)
ReplyDeleteLovin' it Megan! Especially the last two lines: "Deviating from the norm is hard at first/But take action early to avoid being immersed." Very nice way of putting it! :) Nice job!
ReplyDeleteCongradulations
ReplyDeleteI like the pace of your poem, but I think the rhyming scheme is a bit off. It sounds really good though so I wouldn't change it. Could you comment to my blog as well please?
ReplyDeleteI really like the flow of your sonnet!! hahaha Good job(: I really enjoyed reading this!
ReplyDeleteThis was awesome and it definitely flowed
ReplyDeleteGreat work, your sonnet was very well written!
ReplyDeleteComment on mine, please and thank you
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This was well written Megan! The rhyming was good and the only thing that needed work was the iambic pentameter.
ReplyDeletePlease comment on mine! Thank You